I don't mean to detract from your work at all, which is exceptional for your age group, but I do have a suggestion: the next time you decide to use metaphor as an overarching theme for your poetry, perhaps you'd best steer clear of phrases such as 'My alarm clock is a gorilla'. I was unable to keep myself from laughing like a loon.
That said, you've got a good idea. I'd just change the beast you use for your metaphor. A dragon, perhaps, or a lion - they both possess the same qualities you describe (moreso than a gorilla, as the case may be with lions. Gorillas are gentle creatures, and only attack if you really piss them off.